Sunday, June 29, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors #73!

Hello, again, hello! Hope you're all doing well! I'm sharing another nutty eight sentences in today's WWW excerpt, so let's hop to it!

Blurby for Nutcases: It's the year 2033. Since so many people have developed allergies to peanuts in this century, the government has banned peanuts and all peanut-related products, including (*gasp*) peanut butter. Side note: I think that was the most anyone has ever used the word 'peanut' in a sentence. Well, as you can imagine, Morgan, my heroine, refuses to live in a world without PB. So, with the help of my hero, Clark, they build their own peanut-butter-making machine in the secret basement of her home and begin the business of bootlegging. Also, they share a few pb kisses, etc, etc. :-D

And now the excerpt, continuing from where we left off: 

“I just don’t want you to crush me.”

“Too late, I have a major crush on you.” Leaning closer so her lips were within inches of his, she whispered, “You can sleep with me, but you have to pay the toll first.”

“You think you drive such a hard bargain?” His lips eagerly met hers, firm and demanding. The force of his kiss propelled her backward and he climbed over top of her, straddling her thighs. “It’s much nicer up here.”

“Were you all lonesome by yourself?”

Thanks so much for stopping by and be sure to visit the other Weekend Writing Warriors! 

So this Tuesday, July 1st is Canada Day, and I will be celebrating this momentous occasion for the very first time in our nation's capital: Ottawa, Ontario. Apparently it's a street party that goes on for blocks, with live music, buskers, dancing, general merriment, and I'm sure even a few Mounties will show up for some eye candy. I mean, to keep us all in line. Wishing everyone a spectacular week ahead!! :)
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17 comments:

  1. What a couple of nuts those two are, huh? Cute banter. :)
    (Nothing for me this week. Revamping my blog.)

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    1. Nuttiness at it's finest. ;) Thanks so much, Cindy! Good luck with the revamp!

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  2. That's a playful couple! I enjoyed this warm snippet.

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    1. Happy you enjoyed it, S.J.! Thanks! :)

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  4. These two go together like peanut butter and jelly (sorry, couldn't resist!). Enjoyed the scene, ready for more, great 8!

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    1. Hee! I just had some PB and J myself. There's nothing quite as satisfying. ;) Thanks, Veronica!

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  5. What a couple a nuts : ). This story just brings a smile to my face! Happy Canada Day in advance : ). Hope you have a great day!

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    1. Thank you so much, Millie! Happy Almost 4th of July to you! :)

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  6. Lol, poor lamb, was he lonely?;)
    Have fun in Ottawa. I have heard it's a beautiful city. One of these summers I will finally get on the train and see it.

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    1. Just a little bit. ;)

      Ottawa IS beautiful! It's a fantastic city to live in, and I definitely encourage you to visit sometime!

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  7. I knew he wouldn't stay in that bottom bunk for long. Fun snippet, as always!

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    1. He's knows the top bunk is wayyyy more fun. ;) Thanks so much, Alexis!

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  8. Delicious. You've nailed the time and place so well with short, sweet dialogue.

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    1. Awesome to hear! Thanks so much, Charmaine! :)

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  9. Woo hoo! I love the idea of the lips moving close; however, I think you should not repeat the word "lips" when they kiss. It needs a little variety and maybe some more tease before the kiss. It seems to happen fast, but I don't know what came first, so maybe I'm missing something. I'd like to live the kiss with more description. For example, how does he hold her, caress her, or what does he do with his tongue to make him a better kisser than all of the others?

    "He climbed over top of her" comes off as awkward. How about he mounted her, slid on top of her, straddled her, pressed his sexy hips against her groin? Also, the casual dialogue at the end takes away from the steamy moment.

    Over all, this is an intriguing passage with a lot of great possibilities. Thanks for sharing.

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